Comments : Expected battle

  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    This dangerous stuff babyQurl

    I'll pop a longer comment soon

  • 13 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    Oh wow. A battle truly is brewing here. I love the vocabulary and word choices. The last two lines of the first stanza worked amazingly well together and loved the meaning.
    It is sad how one can so easily lose one's friends, and from the sound of it, one's best friend. The ending and the tone throughout the poem is amazing, and so true. How one cannot keep trying to make it well again, if the other person refuses to change their mind.

    The ending is fitting and the only logical set forward in such a situation.

    Amazingly penned.

  • 13 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    An underlying resentment
    that has control over your thoughts,
    has proven once again,
    your opinion will not change

    My fav stanza of the poem. Your choice and use of words is amazing. The poem flows flawlessly and smoothly. I really loved the atitude or strong feelings portrayed in this poem and the ending was amazing. 5

  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    "I've gained a carefree attitude
    that has told my mind,
    you're not worth fighting for-
    any longer"

    I can't even..
    CAN I HAVE THIS?"
    Please, come up BebiGurl
    as a birthday gift or so?

    say "Yes, yaki..you can have this, go share it with the world"

    I love, Love
    the use of "I gained"
    acting as if you're happy to not care...
    as if it was a reward..

    I LIKE,I LIKE,I LOVE,I LOVE..
    Oh come on.. give me this...

    stop taking trips through my mind,
    and stop writing my feelings okay..

    joke, you obviously do a far better job than me..

    and the ending was so RAW..
    I pictured you like a powerranger armed with everything...RAWR..

    I just keep re-reading
    I can relate to this, way too much.

    sljfkhhsdgkahg.

  • 13 years ago

    by average thoughts

    U r such a briliant poet..ur poems r always penned nicely..

  • 13 years ago

    by E Dacaf

    The last 2 lines just blow me down. I love them! For me its the best part. Also very well worded. :]

  • 13 years ago

    by RSJ

    Ahhhh, You got to me again,
    1st of all, I Relate to it, and my favorite part, Is something i'd love to start quoting,
    You've expected a battle, but Now i've brought war.

    5/5 and you really have a way with the wording that makes it very easy for me to enjoy it.
    5/5