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This poem was perhaps the one that related most to the image. When I saw this picture I felt it was restricting, it gave you all the tools but where would the poet take it that it was more creative, more attention grabbing. What I was fond of here was the comparison between man being in love to woman, it wasn't even the comparison between man being in love and woman being in love it was just the comparison in general and a different one, unexpected, which is always good to see. Third stanza, first line of the poem 'day' should be 'Day' and Last stanza first line of the poem 'he' should be 'He.' The one thing I will say is I wasn't too keen on the title simply because it took away from the last stanza of the poem when you actually mentioned glitter escaping his guitar. I liked the vulnerable essence created, once a man finds a passion it's always something beautiful, even if he is covered in grease and pulling apart cars in the backyard, the joy that comes with it is priceless.

-Mel