Andromache

by Garrick Allan   Jan 18, 2012


Andromache

Dragged over the field went your man of such valor.
Unaided by those above, left to the fury of that rage,
Of who took down so many to find the heart of truth,
On that foreign land so long ago.
For who wept longer than you dear lady,
When the son of Peleus took what was yours?
On that foreign land, so long ago.

How do I wipe your tears,
When so long ago did your heart break?
To see him, that one so noble,
Disfigured behind that cruel chariot.
Who held you close
On that grievous day, so long ago?

Now a spoil to the very madness,
That came across the Aegean to your step.
Taking down with swords to flesh.
The sharp blades and the gore,
And what did befall you?
So long ago.

For your loss I do give this one gift
A secret shrine deep within my mind,
Now on quiet nights do I light the censor,
And remember those tears on that tender cheek.
So long ago.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Nicko

    I was drawn to this poem on first read. At times I find Greek mythology hard to follow, so I liked the way you related this part of the tale, which incidentally made it easier to understand. This poem was fluid mature and well worded, with the last stanza finishing strongly capping off a strong poem, if I have one criticism it maybe the over use of "So long ago" though you may well feel this is critical to the structure of the poem, otherwise well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Garrick Allan

    Thank You for your critique.
    Garrick

  • 12 years ago

    by SiLeNtLy ScReAmInG

    I liked how this poem played on greek mythology. Of course I had to relook up which charater Andromache was due to the sheer number and similarity in the names and people from mythology. I'm not sure I liked how the words "so long ago" popped up so many times. I personally felt it became a bit repetative, but I did like how it emphasized how truly long ago the myths actually started. So long ago that no one truly knows what started them. And though I did not like the repetition I did like how it tied the poem together, always so long ago. I also thought the fact that Andromache was the only one you directly mentioned by name, and only in the title leaves an emphasis on HER as well as HER pain and what SHE went through. You didn't call her husband hector or say directly it was achilles that killed him. I think you cleverly weaved scenes from the myths throughout the poem while still focusing on how each related to andromache. I like seeing someone bring old myths and epics into modern day poetry.

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