Hmm well it was interesting. Don't get me wrong But after reading your other poems i expected greater from you. You really are a brilliant writer But this poem is sort of weird. I understand that there's pain behind the whatever but maybe the sentence structure should be changed. Then again what do i know? Sorry. I still liked your previous poems!

Thanks for the constructive feedback. I think I was drunk when I wrote this and just randomly wrote what I was thinking.

Thank you do much for the compliment. I haven't been on here for a while. When my brother died it was like some poetry tap turned on in my head from out of nowhere and it's died down again as I've gotten over it.