In You I Found A Father

This poem touched me. Brought a smile and a tear. It was worded with excellence, an easy and smooth write ..Excellent

I find it heard honestly to write a friendship poem, I don't know why... that's why I seek to read as many friendship poems as I can because I find in them something special, something true and something... I don't know, really extraordinary.

You poured your heart in each line you've written, and I can relate much. Everyone can do that actually...

Awesome.

This poem is really touching and such a beautiful dedication to this person you obviously care deeply about

From reading your other poem and then this one I was really glad to see that the later one was more positive and so beautiful too. Your other poem was so sad and it broke my heart. It was well written of course but so sad

I hope that you do give this poem to your father figure because I am sure he would be proud to have something like this writen about him - anyone would.

Well done

x

Jenni- thank you so much for your imput! I am working on bettering this poem because it is such an important one for me. I appreciate the comments and suggestions!!

Any title suggestions would be great!

I think the title already shows how much this person means to you, but I'd still recommend you to change it, shorten it a bit and make it more eye-catching because this poem deserves to be noticed.

I like the message you convey and you definately manage to underline the importance of this person and the impact he had on you and your life. The fact that you worked with rhymes makes this poem flow better, but I'd still try to keep the syllables amount in each verse similar, which didn't always work out.

There are a few spelling mistakes: first stanza "without" is one word and in the fourth stanza "on the edge" not "one", but it doesn't take away from the poem too much.

Enjoyable read after all!