It's been a long time since I've read anything from you and it's nice to see you back. I still remember a certain poem written by you, I believe it was titled Juice box. That piece has always lingered in the back of my mind and was a favourite.

I've always appreciated your poetry but I'm most fond of the bond you have with nature, through your words it's obvious that it's not just your love but an appreciation not too many have as deep as yours; this is another one of the pieces that really portray this to your audience.

I enjoyed your ability to make the reader relax with your tone, it is one thing to do this but when you transport someone to a completely different environment and allow the reader to make it their own that's when the body eases into a tranquil mind state. The only thing that I wasn't as keen on in this poem was the mention of the word "Hijacked" I understand why you used it but it was just a harsher sounding word for such a beautiful environment. I liked the use of the word "devoured" in such a scene because it reminded me of nature at its finest.

Pleasure reading this piece,
-Mel

/In the midst of a humid summer
my body relaxed within natures sauna
moisture traveled from my lips
cooling my thirst for peace.
//
indeed one can be at peace marvelling the nature. There's a kind of serenity in these lines, that makes the reader actually feel the peace you mentioned.

/limber, broken, melting in a field
of Poppys....

// here i loved the imagery of poppy fields. Brings some color to the image.

//and on that very day
I became a fallen petal
floating in a pond
of eternal bliss....
//
hoe beautiful .. the last lines. It's line giving one self away ... to be forever lost in the beauty of nature.

beautiful write.

Simply beautiful and relaxing !
it actually made me smile : )
well done
5/5

HOLY SHISHKABABBBBBBBBBBBBBBB!!!

You just said you were gonna' write something with 'poppys' and I'm glad the post inspired you.

Go Andrea, I love it... especially the ending. It felt that I, too, were that fallen petal in that pond!!

This is a HOT write. like no other.

Winner, too, Winner..

"a fragrance of memories
devoured my ageless soul
and on that very day
I became a fallen petal
floating in a pond
of eternal bliss.... "

Beautiful :-)

This poem is so lovely, well-written and was a breath of fresh air. I really love how you wrote about summer and nature, and I love your imagery. I could imagine the scenes you painted with your words.. and it was really nice. The last stanza was beautiful and amazing. Loved it!

Great job =)

I like your poems sista. They make me feel peaceful.

Awesome!

I float along this beautiful piece

love
Ole

Its really good and great bringing it together very well job

I feel peace in this piece.

Sleep my child, sleep

I like this sentence.. The most.
All of the poem but that one just pops.

Oh beautiful!

The words are quite relaxing and the images are serene. I love this poem.

The words flow so well!!!

I love the last stanza - it is so peaceful and magestic!

Awesome!

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