Sun Eternal Time

I liked that you incorporated nature in describing your love for this person. Using nature as a theme to convey your thoughts, always give an iota of realism. This is romantic and sweet. Your poured out your heart to this subject. You showed how this entity plays an integral factor in your life. The subject makes you feel happy, loved and gives a sense of belonging. You want to be associated with this subjects value and always stay with its blessings.

You beautifully conveyed how you feel about this entity and how much you're telling him or her that together you'll both sail through happy moments in the light. Together you'll conquer any hindrance that may arise and you'll be each others confidant and support. Love is suppose to be a 2 way lane not 1. You both need to affirm you're each others hero and half, so that you can walk through all pandemonium in ease. Love is a beautiful thing if shared with the fated person.
Good read, Bon Travail! :) ..

Very romantic and sweet...i like the way you deliver your words..but try to look in 3rd stanza..

>Do you see my whisper?
i think it is fit if you write--Do you hear my whisper? Just an opinion..it depends on you..but, over all I enjoy reading this piece..good work=)

Good Poem5/5

You have done a great job in this poem, keep up the great work.

Romance lives with this beauty. Touching, tenderness in each word. The flow was smooth, the intoxication of love makes the reader giddy.
Very good write