My Father's War

by Sora   Jan 25, 2012


I can see you dying
I stretch my hand towards you
I want to end your suffering
But what can I really do?

Your voice is different now
You stumble as you walk away
I wanted to scream "Dad!"
But then and there I seen your
pride start to decay

You've lost everything
But you have not lost me
Open your eyes wide
This world is yours to see

I forgot what your laugh was like
You lost that smile in your eyes
I want you to reach out your hands
And aim for the grey skies

You can ease the rain that's falling
The streaks streaming down your face
Stand on your own two feet again
This pain you must finally embrace

Your dreams have slowly diminished
And your heart is crying out
But I cannot heal it for you
How much longer can you shout?

Pain doesn't have to be an option
You don't deserve such agony
Don't proceed with this madness
Or your life will end in tragedy

I've helped you for so long now
And my tears will never stop for you
You have to accept these changes
And start your life anew

I saw those tears in your eyes
The ones you were so afraid to bear
But I'll take them for myself
Because your pain I want to share

Release yourself of these burdens
No more crying in the night
No more feeling sorry for yourself
It's time you stand and fight

I've seen you at your best and your worst
But now your sorrow will be no more
Because this is not who you really are
So come dad, let us fight this war

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  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This is sad, yet hopeful. The imagery that comes to my mind is: the persona's father is in his deathbed, perhaps.? This really touched me, because I know that feeling. When my dad was just 'waiting'..
    "I want you to reach out your hands
    And aim for the grey skies"
    ---This stood out for me. It's how I felt when I knew he was giving up, and saying goodbye.. I also like this 'cause of the 'grey skies' lol..
    "Because this is not who you really are
    So come dad, let us fight this war"
    ---Yess.. I love this.
    Overall, an awesome peace. Pulling the reader in to feel that emotion, yet in the ending, leaving them with a sense of hope. The rhymes were spot on. Great job. I absolutely love this. Keep it up
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Illusion

    This is touching. I'm just about to drop a tears but the last three lines gives the hope...

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Oh, my gush! This is so really sad..I wanna cry out loud because I feel the sorrow you taste while writing this poem for your dad...I feel the power of emotion..every word you write in this piece is very great...

    I can see you dying
    I stretch my hand towards you
    I want to end your suffering
    But what can I really do?

    Your voice is different now
    You stumble as you walk away
    I wanted to scream "Dad!"
    But then and there I seen your
    pride start to decay

    You've lost everything
    But you have not lost me
    Open your eyes wide
    This world is yours to see

    How much the pain and sadness you feel while watching your dad encountering that pain....that you prayed all the pain will end so your dad will rest from that dying..really sad=(

    I forgot what your laugh was like
    You lost that smile in your eyes
    I want you to reach out your hands
    And aim for the grey skies

    >this part, i want to cry..very amazing of describing your feeling here...my god! I can gasp any words to praise it...it was totally great and touchy...

    rate you gurl deserves to vote of 5/5

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