Titania

This form Is beautiful and you gave It life.... what a breathtaking piece, filled with a powerful and explosive word display.... the mystical feel and Imagery is just wonderful.... really enjoyed this piece, well done~

Excellent. Great form, great flow, imagery is there. It goes being a poem of grandeur to becoming something sultry and dark. Few poems can start as something and then finish on the opposite end of the scale.

Well done. 5/5

Brilliant, enjoyable and sheer talent rings true in this stunning piece

I love this piece. There's something so sophisticated about a poem whose subject is a dark "heroin" of sorts.

"She wears the moon around her wrist,
Like a hexed trinket of a faun
Ominous; the sun's dream at dawn."

^ I love the imagery, personification and metaphoric pictures you've painted. It's a stunning opening stanza

"Sinners, in her presence exist.
The fairest queen of seven sins
With orchid eyes and glittered skin."

^ I imagine this "queen" being absolutely, painfully and dangerously beautiful, so much so that she entices everyone into committing sin. "Orchid eyes" is a gorgeous metaphor. Very original.

"She's the epitome of kitsch twist,
Of bouncing breasts and untamed lips
Miming the sweet sway of her hips."

^ I have to admit, I wasn't familiar with Kitsch Twist so I googled it, and am I right in understanding it to be a style of fashion?? If so, this added further depth to the visualising of the persona. If I'm wrong in my understanding, please help!!

"Who among us does not insist?
The virgin who's unworn and fresh
Perhaps, the valiant, full of flesh?"

^ The questions in this stanza really change the tone of the poem, I liked it a lot. I didn't imagine her being a virgin, but somehow this makes her even more dangerous!!!

"The cold hands of death shall persist.
The noble, we'll no longer be
As she whispers, airy fairy."

^ A very eery ending I must say! The overall poem's voice changes back and forth between beauty and evil intent. If this was purposeful, then it was very clever of you. It takes the reader on a journey. Draws us in and then bites us on the nose!

I really liked the form and thought you did it well

Good job

You have done a beautiful job on the form...
the flow is smooth and nothing seems to be forced here. I have tried this form and it's so tough but you make it sound so easy to write.

I loved the imagery, ...
/The fairest queen of seven sins
With orchid eyes and glittered skin.
//
beautiful descriptions specially the orchid eyes.

well written piece.