This wasn't made for not writing in a long time...

I think what youre going to hear from readers is:
Don't capitalize each line of every stanza..I know people say it makes the poem a little harder to read.
Theres also a lot of repetition in this poem. Repeating words usually weakens the poem a little, then again I see thats the way you actually wanted your poem, you purposely did that so I didn't mind it so much.

The sadness and tone in this poem was definitely felt. I'm sorry for your loss!
Chelsey

This poem is really sad...full of emotion but some parts contribute of none vivid sort of lines. But, I think this is your style of writing as what Chelsey said. Nonetheless, I can picture out the message behind this..I can sense the feeling conveys in the imagery and I enjoyed reading. Keep it up more:)

Beautiful poem.