In Time

With enough "will" you can shape your own destiny.
Rather then waiting for destiny to find you. Failure cannot cope with persistence!

I really liked the opening stanza, it really pulled me in... I like the imagery you created.

It made me sad to read about the dreams of making it big and how they are crushed... I always feel disappointed if someone does that to me!

The last stanza was sad... but also reminded me of the way we feel sometimes... and how everything can get us down.

Good job with this poem :)

Very true indeed. Your poems are mostly centred around rights and the ills occuring in our societies. I so much liked the ending part; 'you are just human and so will, fall a victim to time'. No matter the wealth one amass; its just a pile of paper if its not meant to serve humanity. Simple and straight to the point. Very educative as well, SUPERB poem written from the heart. God help us all, God give us God fearing, responsible and diligent leaders, Ameen. Stay blessed, Kudos!

Amazing it makes me smile and has great depth so well fix the live to leave and it will be perfect well done sir 5

/My mind is a fortress
of un lived realities
//
liked the imagery of mind as a fortress filled with dreams and realities.

/For no matter your wealth
you are just human and so will
fall victim to time
//
very true, we come into this world alone and we will go alone. None of our accomplishments, our treasures will accompany us. beautifully said.