Comments : Bumper Car (Acrostic)

  • 12 years ago

    by Failing Stoic

    It never ceases to amaze me how much creativity and talent there is on this site. A poem about bumper cars - how awesome. I love the way you refer to them as "brothers," it's such a friendly description.

    "Chaos lives in this
    arena where wreckage and
    retaliation bear no weight"

    It's funny how our attitudes towards eachother change when we know it's a game and there are no hard feelings. Maybe we should all have a weekly dose of bumper cars just to let off some steam. Could be some sort of anger management therapy, so we take ourselves less seriously haha

    Great and original poem, going into my favourites, well done, keep them coming!

  • 12 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Nevi,*

    I'm really fond of this little acrostic, when I picked bumper cars I was excited to see what an MM could come up with and this delighted me. You've placed it in the Misc section but to me it has a deeper idea, I saw friendship and I would of never combined friendship with bumper cars. What a creative mind.

    I also loved the word "basket" again another unusual description but fitting. The term "brothers" formed that friendship idea I was speaking about, but it went beyond this. The poem was so boyish, it had that boyish friendship to it, belligerent so to say.

    Also the analysis given above was something to think about, but this is what I'm speaking of when I say boyish, the way men argue is different to women, they get over it super quick instead of holding grudges, just as quickly as if you were having a ride on the bumper cars!

    Nice job with the subtle alliteration and for tackling this form head on. It's always a pleasure when you write a new poem.

    -Mel.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Wonderful acrostic :D I loved the creative metaphors and word choice. In such a small piece you have painted very impressive and lively images :) well written

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I love bumper cars, haha
    This was a great example of how it is, but without the physical rush..
    Good write