I kinda got lost in this piece. But once I figured it out the point was clear and the word choice was ok. I wasnt real thrilled by the piece but it was ok.

Thanks for the advise i hope i get an award someday

I can tell you are capible of getting one. Just keep writting and who knows what will happen :)

Awww thanks

PErhaps the confusion that seems to be palpable in this piece stems from the general discoordination one lives in when one suffers a monumental loss like the loss of a loved one.

The only thing I can say is that this piece needs either punctuation or line breaks. :)

Ok i will try better nest time