Comments : Open Your Heart

  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    I really enjoyed this poem, great writing, amazing.

  • 12 years ago

    by Whispy.Gypsy

    I liked it and rated 5/5 i wish all ppl could realize what is happening over in Africa and would help instead of laughing in their faces :( i have friends who when we r watching tv at someones house all they do is laugh at it

  • 12 years ago

    by John Dlyan Boone BABY

    Wow that is so heartless its not funny in any type or way

  • 12 years ago

    by Pretty Punk Princess

    I really like this one its heartbreaking and it makes you think about what you have that others don't

  • 12 years ago

    by Pain

    Well done im gona see the new from you

  • 12 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This was very inspiring...good job...and I agree....a lot of poeple try not to think about it but these people are real and they need help :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Rihanna

    What can I say it's beatiful I loved it.
    Thought it's sad to see children in so much need.

    Such sorrow in Africa
    children starving without food
    belly's swelling up in pain
    help the family's give the kids a future
    give a penny quarter dollar anything
    do what you can for this sadness
    their people just like me and you
    they feel the same pains we do
    they know what it means for a piece of grain

    ^
    Such a sad starting.
    Kids in Africa starving without food.
    I love the message this brings to the readers. Knowing people are suffering from hunger in Africa,bellys swelling from pain. Knowing that a quarter dollar can feed an innocent child.

    Such a powerful poem that says a lot.

    give a penny for they need it so
    truly help another soul
    give what you can for a hungry soul
    don't allow the children to die
    give them faith give them hope
    give them the power to know their not alone
    come with me and be the savior
    for a nation whose lost all hope

    ^^
    Second stanza.
    Knowing a penny can do a lot for a child in Africa that's suffering from hunger. I loved how you gave the message in this stanza to help a soul in need and not let them die, give them faith and hope, let them know there not alone.

    I loved how you ended it
    By saying come with be and we'll save the souls for a nation in need.

    So sad.
    The flow was amazing.
    But if you had separated the poem and made it into stanzas it would have been perfect!

    But still it's a really good poem
    With a good message..

    5/5 well done!