by Marienne Feb 4, 2012
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
When We Were Young We Would Play |
I can empathize with you about wishing you told someone you loved about how you felt.This would have made a great poem but for your use of words;there are a lot of grammatical errors especially with concord of tenses.This seriously hinders the flow of the poem and makes it less enjoyable.I hope to see something better from you. |