Razors edge _Infidelity

This poem really goes deep, and the emotions you pen are just breathtaking, they have a spirit of their own and are linked with a sad understanding......there's a lot to read into your thoughts and especially the unfaithfulness, never experienced it of course but you make want to strive towards loyalty in someone even more.

Powerful piece, powerful title, and really beautiful yet devastating how you portray each thought.
Take care!

Oh bro, this piece is very descriptive. The vocabulary is powerful and the metaphors are extremely good. This piece chisels one's soul, yet the physical pain isnt felt, but the emotional turmoil is elevated.

TJ, I like how you took this brutally dark poem to humanity levels of unfaithfulness. Each line stood to me like a mountain of powerful language.

though I'd like to see this line edited:

Rattle of ones last breath escape blue lips

because it feels somehow wordy. just an opinion though.... for the rest, I really love the wording and what social messages you're trying to say.

EXALT

One of the saddest experiences is going through infedility. I cant stand unfaithfulness, if your that type of person I dont understand why people even get into relationships..

You have penned a crazy poem here. The words were so angry and yet so deep and powerful, those who have gone through it and even those who have not cant feel your attitude towards this person and this subject.

Great write!

You used a creative metaphor; to twist it in with the raw emotions you're left with after the person you loved and who supposedly 'loved' you, betrays you like this. It was pretty painful to even read! It's filled with so much anguish and anger! Your words are powerful, and cutting-edge, you get right down to the heart-of-the matter. It's really sad that THIS had to be the 'matter' though..
I think this is an amazing write!

5/5