Yaki,
This was amazing!!!

You sound full of self loathing, like you want to be left alone for your afraid to be loved because you can't love yourself, hmmm, I'm pondering over this because I can't see what would make you feel this way,

You are awesome Girl!!!

I love the flow, and the bitterness, the way you are stubborn that you are right when you are so terribly wrong.

You deserve to have everything Yaki,
Such a great piece if not a little sad.

Love xxxx

I'm totally amazed with the poem you wrote...great flow,good word-usage...!!!
It was so filled with every emotion of self-reluctance and how,despite consistent endeavour armed with goodness, it still didn't budge the stubborn soul you possess...!!!

Commendable poem girl....!!

I tried to warn you..

in my world
no one is welcomed,
the language here
is a mixture of judgment
and farewells.

^^
beautiful verse and a good beginning...

good work...:)

that there is no justice
in this, that you can
throw three pounds of sugar
in the coffee but it will
remain bitter.

^^
my favorite^_^

This was super intese yaki...I get so into your poetry, my face gets close to the screen, I read it with such depth, I feel your sadness, I love it!

The part about redlipstick being actualy blood, so spooky but seriously amazingly written and it shows what you thought was one thing as actually not that at all in your relationship..

This is such a heartfelt write, but a sad heartfelt write :/...

By the way

that there is no justice
in this, that you can
throw three pounds of sugar
in the coffee but it will
remain bitter.

^ Theres yet another quote that needs to be made famous and said by all!

This poem was amazing Sweet Cheeks.
I feel that its about failure, someone trying to accomplish the impossible, most stories like this end in happiness and ever after and what not, but this took me on a twist, it went back and forth from hopeful to rejection and back to hopeful and ended in rejection. I wasnt expecting that.

Is it normal to cry at while re-reading an old poem mense. am i nuts