by William J Feb 7, 2012
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Life, society /
other
Pregnant puddles swell into labouring pools. |
by William J
I'm glad you've told me the stuff that bothered you :). A couple of these I spose are just the styles I've taken up from writers such as Ginsberg. The full stops at the end of each line represent individual thoughts, to show the slow thought process of the individual at the time, and also the slow process of the expanding rain on the ground. |
by Hellon
I have no idea why you have a period at the end of every line and a capital to follow when you continue, what should be a sentence, on? |
by Lioness
I can see the image clearly and you have described everything so well |
by Maple Tree
Oh I'm loving the word usage and imagery in this piece..... very very nice~ |
You penned a picture of perfect imagery.. Excellent |