Burning Cigarette

Lol this reminds me so much of my older sister haha, as always, the imagery your poetry projects is flawless. Nice one Andrea

I absolutely loved the first two stanzas. They are full of vitality and playfulness, and make good use of poetic device. Unfortunately, the last stanza is much weaker and is a bit of a let down for the reader.

The reason is that in the first two stanzas you "showed" us your crazy side, with a lot of great imagery, but in the last stanza, you simply "told" us that you were settled, calm, and at peace, which is not very poetic.

How about, "but now I waltz with my husband" or other images that connote calmness and peace and "shows" the reader in a visual way that you are now settled down.

Maybe it's not exact but dang can I relate..
awesome

I love how your poems give different interpretations. they make my mind like if I just got off the merry go round -- seeing double figures.

I love the tongue twister of denim demon. Reading it quickly I kept messing it up, saying denim denum. lol

Your title has ciggy spelled differently than the rest of the poem, I do believe it is only one "G".

So your smoking pretty much brings you back to your wild child days of mushrooms at carnivals? :) I loved the, the nostalgia and the reminiscing. This was a great read!