Oh awesomeeeeeeeeeeee

I love this. I read it as though you're telling us that you once had this other side of you, this person that you used to be

Even though you have changed - there are still pieces of this person still within you (as the eternal flame)

Brilliant!!!

x

I think this is such a beautiful piece about a girl... probably a prostitute? with her moves and the cigarette!! Awesome descriptions.....

and when she has changed, she still go back to her history through the cigarette. I don;'t know if that's the way.. but any level: EXCELLENT

Keep the smirk. It makes you unique.Great piece.

I always love ur writings, great great poem:)5/5

Great poem! Brings back some good memories! Love it!

I love the tongue twister of denim demon. Reading it quickly I kept messing it up, saying denim denum. lol

Your title has ciggy spelled differently than the rest of the poem, I do believe it is only one "G".

So your smoking pretty much brings you back to your wild child days of mushrooms at carnivals? :) I loved the, the nostalgia and the reminiscing. This was a great read!

I love how your poems give different interpretations. they make my mind like if I just got off the merry go round -- seeing double figures.

Maybe it's not exact but dang can I relate..
awesome

I absolutely loved the first two stanzas. They are full of vitality and playfulness, and make good use of poetic device. Unfortunately, the last stanza is much weaker and is a bit of a let down for the reader.

The reason is that in the first two stanzas you "showed" us your crazy side, with a lot of great imagery, but in the last stanza, you simply "told" us that you were settled, calm, and at peace, which is not very poetic.

How about, "but now I waltz with my husband" or other images that connote calmness and peace and "shows" the reader in a visual way that you are now settled down.

Lol this reminds me so much of my older sister haha, as always, the imagery your poetry projects is flawless. Nice one Andrea