Good poem, I like the heartfelt emotions that you expressed in this poem, like when you say that you'll wait for him until you dying day that's true love. Good Job

1 advice capitalize the I's:)

This poem is really sad, but it shows true strong love:)
Gd job:)

"maybe destiny can separate us,

but no matter what happened to us

i want you to know that im still here,

my dying days may come but the feelings

that i have would be forever yours."

BOOM! ... these are the very words my mind keep coming up with everytime I see that special someone I was once with... i so feel this..great poem!

I think that you need to keep in mind to capiltalize the "I" and I do not really like the addiotional space line between the verses because it kind of distracted me and made me wonder what purpose it had, but then again it is up to you how cou'd like to present your poem.
The content is clear, but you do not leave a lot of space for interpretation or imagination since you are really straightforward. I miss metaphors or images, that visualize your thoughts. Please do not take this personal. I realized that the emotions are quite strong.

Oh and I also think that you should not put the title in full caps because it is against the rules as far as I know.

Thanks for the comment,.i promise next time i'll do it better..thanks ...

Thanks for the comment,.i promise next time i'll do it better..thanks ...

Wow, the last three lines got me, thinking of the song I've made last year ago that has a title 'never get tired'

Thanks for sharing your piece of writing men! ;D