Dingy Dew Drop and City Streets

5/5.Excellent write.One can visualize you sitting on the cemented .......moving in life by singing your life song.

I'm a fallen star, caught within a noon day sun
Lost between night and day, dew drop eyes

I'm amazed! This was excellent, As always. :) You painted your picture so well, I could almost taste nicotine or feel the chilly air on my skin. You've got that talent! Wonderful write! I like this.

5/5

Great imagery /words one can visualize it . Well done

I'm out of words on what to say about this fantastic piece. It keeps one going on and on, unfolding the next daily ritual of the day for this sophisticated lady. I like the theme, the poem centres within.

KUDOS!!! Excellent piece. :)

Tells a story of a ritualistic woman, getting older
Placing her white flag on a dingy city sidewalk
Watching traffic drive by, singing her life song....
^^
This is my fav part:)
( singing her life song) < this line reminded me of something happened to me

All in all a really great poem:)