Lava flow

by TJ Arizona Eagle   Feb 15, 2012


Lava deluge mountain top
A cascade of sparks you cannot stop
Annihilating everything in its path
Behold the fear of her wrath

Don't get to near the fires intense
You better run use common sense
She feels neither remorse nor empathy
Knows not the meaning of sympathy

Like a match trees burst in to flames
What is in her path she does claim?
Each foot print is simply vexed
Oh wait a minute it's just my ex

*old poem*

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  • 12 years ago

    by East Poetry

    Really dug this poem from the beginning.
    giving character to the flow of lava, such a powerful and destructive thing.

    this Poem had a grandeur to it as it first fill my mind bringing me through the first and second stanza's

    Admittedly this grandeur is lost once the poem shifts to a more whimsical tone with the connection to your ex. Not a bad thing, whimsical poems are great too.

    a few minor suggestions though. it seems you had to force the rhyme so that you could accurately connect it to your ex. the rhyme and rhythm of this poem is perfect in the beginning and middle, but the last stanza staggers a bit.
    Over all I absolutely dug this poem.

    My suggestion
    Like a match trees burst in to flames
    What's in her path she always claims.
    Each foot prints like and evil vex.
    Oh wait a minute it's just my ex

  • 12 years ago

    by White Orchid

    This was soo funny! I like how u compared your ex to an erupting volcano. Lol. Loved it! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by tainted melody

    Lol this was halarious! My friend was next to me when I read it and i had to read it to her lol Thank you for putting a smile on my face :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This is cute

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Love this piece TJ.... so fun and made me giggle....

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