Smiles and I needed them now. lol I remember this one and it is still funny. The last line pulls it altogether.

Hahaha! Yes I love surprises at the end of poems and you really surprised me with this one.

The idea that your ex was lava flowing from a volcano destructing everything in her path was amazing.

I love this poem. Brilliant and smart!!!

x

Lava deluge mountain top
A cascade of sparks you cannot stop
Annihilating everything in its path
Behold the fear of her wrath

^^Interesting "hook" and nice imagery.

Don't get to near the fires intense
You better run use common sense
She feels neither remorse nor empathy
Knows not the meaning of sympathy

^^Dang clear and very exaggerated, yet nice feel of her and the situation

Like a match trees burst in to flames
What is in her path she does claim?
Each foot print is simply vexed
Oh wait a minute it's just my ex

^^Cruel in a way, funny to most and a nice wrap up of the piece.

Over all the flow was great, the tone was fair and the style was excellent. I think you have once again penned something extraordinary.

5/5

MRK

ROFL

My king, you put a smile on my face.Thanks!Loved your piece.

Hahaha :) this is so funny wonderful and delightful just outstanding and amazing I loved it alot,,fantastic write and another favorite of mine though I love everything you write,,maybe it's because I love poetry so much heheh :D jk but seriously 5/5 wickedly amazing :)

:-D, you really got everyone there. Your creativity in making up humourous pieces is marvelling.
Gods blessings be with you always, you really got me laughing. Nice one, KUDOS!!!

Thank you! This poem reminded me that poetry doesn't always have to be intensely emotional to move the reader. It was a delight to read and I enjoyed the idea that you were so over her!

Definately one I can relate to. I will enjoy reading further work from you.

Haha.. Yeah, I was not expecting that part.

Lava deluge mountain top
A cascade of sparks you cannot stop
Annihilating everything in its path
Behold the fear of her wrath

^I like how you started this poem, you put it under the funny section and gave a good description of what is to come!

Don't get to near the fires intense
You better run use common sense
She feels neither remorse nor empathy
Knows not the meaning of sympathy

^Well volcanoes do not have any feelings what so ever and when they explode, they really flow without a second thought about what is in their path. I also like the rhyme scheme you used here too :)

Oh wait a minute it's just my ex

^Well I can only imagine to think of this person! I was wondering why volcano was in this section until I read the end :D Well penned! Enjoyed reading this!

Women are like fire to men: they cannot help but stare at them and often get burned in the process..but still the flames keep on hypnotising them, ha ha ha.

In your poem I can clearly see how much you love women, TJ:)

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

Hahahahahaha, was not expecting that ending at all. Well, you got a creative sense of humor. And I got to agree that women and fire have something in common :P

This was very fun to read, great piece TJ.

Enjoyed this write -dealt with serious and entertaining at the same time ...............dangerous ex !!!

Love this piece TJ.... so fun and made me giggle....

This is cute

Lol this was halarious! My friend was next to me when I read it and i had to read it to her lol Thank you for putting a smile on my face :)

This was soo funny! I like how u compared your ex to an erupting volcano. Lol. Loved it! 5/5

Really dug this poem from the beginning.
giving character to the flow of lava, such a powerful and destructive thing.

this Poem had a grandeur to it as it first fill my mind bringing me through the first and second stanza's

Admittedly this grandeur is lost once the poem shifts to a more whimsical tone with the connection to your ex. Not a bad thing, whimsical poems are great too.

a few minor suggestions though. it seems you had to force the rhyme so that you could accurately connect it to your ex. the rhyme and rhythm of this poem is perfect in the beginning and middle, but the last stanza staggers a bit.
Over all I absolutely dug this poem.

My suggestion
Like a match trees burst in to flames
What's in her path she always claims.
Each foot prints like and evil vex.
Oh wait a minute it's just my ex