Comments : A swing in the sky

  • 12 years ago

    by Mermaid Woman

    I enjoyed this poem very much... so hopeful and lovely.

    I have only one critique. I would change the following line from;
    "Every layer are sewed with our love"
    to
    Every layer sewn with our love. Or all layers sewed with our love.

    This allows the flow to continue unarrested.
    Happy writing!!!