Lie to Me Again

This poem grips at my heart.... truly an elegant and powerful piece, it flows and sings like a tearful song... well done~

This one was so smooth. Loved the way you expressed it all while monitoring flow of words. So much of emotions has been released here, yet...everything was under control.
Very nicely written.

all the best and take care

The most captivating thing I feel was the tone of the poem. Usually a heart break would make people write in anguish and anger ... which can be felt their words, but here the mood is calm, yet one could feel how much hurt or pain is beneath those words. The imagery is that of someone who has lost all hope and is seeking shelter in the lies or maybe a dream that could never flourish.
Beautiful write. I just loved how expressive the poem is.

My Love, wash away our sins,
and bring me back when
we had forgotten our pain
and our sorrows
while we danced away in the rain.

^^This is a descriptive beginning that found a way to draw me in. Even though I am curious and that isnt a hard thing to do.

Tell me you love me again
and these wounds will mend
as the days wither away
into grey skies
that pour down with each word we say.

^^ You have painted an interesting image here and you have shown some intriguing emotion.

And once again lie to me
as the end we'll see
that we're made to be apart
like love and hate,
that corrode this broken heart.

^^Wow, amazing ending... if amazing is even close to a strong enough word. And the emotion is clear and conveyed well.

The flow of this piece is excellent and the style is nice. The word choice is extremely simple but it seemed to work well in this piece. I really enjoyed this even though it is very sad.

5/5
MRK

I do not know why exactly, but you really captivated and touched me with that title, maybe because I can actually feel it. It made me think about what's worse, whether it's the fact that we know it's a lie or wanting to hear it anyway.

I really like the first stanza, especially the tenderness and sincerity. You could have started it with "Love" but you chose "My Love" instead, which underlines the speakers wish for the closeness that was there, I also think that "love" is the most meaningful term of endearment that there is.

Obviously it does make everything better when our loved ones tell us how much we mean to them, I actually wanted to say that it'd make the sun shine again thoughit is different here. The speaker is surrounded by an onerous atmosphere, maybe because he knows that it's just a lie.

The last stanza brought it all together really well, I like the fact that the speaker is honest to himself and admits that the love does not have a chance.

The rhymes made the whole poem flow smoothly and the emotions were really heartfelt.