Interesting piece, I can relate to it more than most would expect and wow, it was very well written. I like the subtle rhymes, though they dont appear very often. The word choice was a little dry so to speak and the style was quite bland too. I mean the message was stunning and clear but most other aspects felt a little out of place. I would say that this piece could get a 3 at best from me, just for the fact that it pretty much seemed emotionless, powerless, styleless, and immaculate wordless. Better luck next time, I will have to see more of your work next time I have a sec though.

I stand by my 3/5

MRK