Bleed You Out

by Jenna Bella Oldridge   Feb 26, 2012


Knife to the skin
Convictions in doubt
Silently screaming
I'll bleed you out

Yearning for truth
In a lifetime of lies
It took this pain to
Force open my eyes

Now I will drain you
Pour you out of me
In a crimson storm
I'll set myself free

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  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Badly intense. Raw and deep. Wow on the image you show here. Gave me a chill for the way you want to move on.
    Excellent(:

  • Knife to the skin
    Convictions in doubt
    Silently screaming
    I'll bleed you out

    ^^
    Very vivid imagery.
    Perfect flow, rhyme and pace here.
    Fantastic opening stanza - really sets the mood for the poem.

    Yearning for truth
    In a lifetime of lies
    It took this pain to
    Force open my eyes

    ^^
    Great follow up from stanza 1.
    Kept up with the rhythm of the piece.
    Again, great rhyme and flow.

    Now I will drain you
    Pour you out of me
    In a crimson storm
    I'll set myself free

    ^^
    Powerful ending!
    Again, good use of imagery.
    ________________________________
    OVERALL;
    I love how relatable this piece is.
    I also love the fast pace of the piece and the rhymes were great.
    Dark, emotional and angry!

    Keep writing. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    I love dark poems, I love these types of poems, I'm glad I decided to take a look at your poetry.... the title drew me in of-course, bleed. knife to skin, I like that opening and I agree with everlasting you have a nice flow and nice rhymes - makes this dark poem an even more enjoyable read :)

  • 12 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Such raw emotion! I really like your choice of short lines...it added tk the intensity portrayed by your words.

    Well done!

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I really enjoy the flow and the rhymes
    P