Bleed You Out

Badly intense. Raw and deep. Wow on the image you show here. Gave me a chill for the way you want to move on.
Excellent(:

Knife to the skin
Convictions in doubt
Silently screaming
I'll bleed you out

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Very vivid imagery.
Perfect flow, rhyme and pace here.
Fantastic opening stanza - really sets the mood for the poem.

Yearning for truth
In a lifetime of lies
It took this pain to
Force open my eyes

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Great follow up from stanza 1.
Kept up with the rhythm of the piece.
Again, great rhyme and flow.

Now I will drain you
Pour you out of me
In a crimson storm
I'll set myself free

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Powerful ending!
Again, good use of imagery.
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OVERALL;
I love how relatable this piece is.
I also love the fast pace of the piece and the rhymes were great.
Dark, emotional and angry!

Keep writing. 5/5

I love dark poems, I love these types of poems, I'm glad I decided to take a look at your poetry.... the title drew me in of-course, bleed. knife to skin, I like that opening and I agree with everlasting you have a nice flow and nice rhymes - makes this dark poem an even more enjoyable read :)

Such raw emotion! I really like your choice of short lines...it added tk the intensity portrayed by your words.

Well done!

I really enjoy the flow and the rhymes
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