by Lonely Rider
I actually went and read wiki to know more about Cleopatra ... |
That was Cleopatra. A beautiful woman on the outside, her heart very cold. She had no remorse. I love this poem, you described |
by Ms Happiness
Awww its kind of sad:( |
by Meena Krish
She lurked behind corridors |
I have a different take on this poem. |
by Jad
Sorry it took me so long!!! But I really loved this poem and just the sadness one can feel from the memories that this statue symbolizes. Your words are very powerful and though they are simple, they hold strong meaning and are very powerful how you have worded them. The poem itself had a good flow and I liked how there was some rhyming in the poem but you didn't have it restricted to a single format. Your words speak of great sadness and despair. One can glen the past sorrows of this person just from a stanza or two and you have the reader so captivated by then that they read more to know what the ending tells. |
by Lioness
Oh the last line in this just broke my heart. |
by Lioness
Congratulations!!! A well deserved win!!! |
by Ms Happiness
Im soooooooo happy for u:) |
by Karla
Sista, well deserved win. |
by Meena Krish
Congrats on the win :) |
This was beautifully written, and well deserving of the win! I loved the flow of this piece and that despair that runs right from the first description to the continued imagery of Cleopatra as a woman and ruler. I love how you took the subject, took her emotions and weaved them into something truly delved in sadness, the memory of her fading and she can't get a form of true power, everything is disguised. |
by Sunshine
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I read this a few times, each time wondering why the Poetess is using Cleopatra statue, to capture her legendary story. I finally arrived to the conclusion that it is the statue itself that evoked the poet's emotions. She is trying to capture Cleopatra's life and times that she senses from her interpretation of the legend, gazing at the statue, perhaps. The mention of the "thick eyeliner, thick as the Nile" was beautiful. Kohl, the eyeliner not only beautified the eyes of the Egyptian woman of those times, but also disguised the "tears" or other emotions in them. |
by Baby Rainbow
Wow, this is very different. I have never read anything about Cleopatra before, it is very unique. |
Wow! This is emotive of sadness. A lovely description of the idolized Queen of all times. A beauty reckoned and a reign full of power infused with passions empathy. You within few lines described her persona, feelings, people and the timing of this epoch beauty's royalty. So beautiful is she the sky turns crimson in her presence whilst the moon glorifies her. Sadness is her company as she's feared the most cunning and charming Queen. |
by nameless
Wonderful poem with some nice details and imagery ie. "eyeliner thick as the river nile" and "dark skies kiss the sunlight." |
by Midnight Sky
This sad but it is great written emotional piece you have here |
by Pagan Paul
This is just ... beautiful, worthy of the Lady who inspired it. |