I think that the message here is extremely clear as is the emotion. I mean I this piece is stunning, as usual, but somehow it is missing something; I just can't tell what. Lots of people could relate to this real well, I'm sure, that includes myself. So that is one skill you have seemed to master. As for the technicalities of the piece, the flow is amazing, the style is phonominal, and the thought process seems perfect. However, the word choice seems a little bit bland, it did its job in expressing you, though it was unable to move me, or give me reason to praise it. The last stanza, about smiling is by far my favorite, the imagery enveloped in the sadness just spoke to me in a way, I guess that's how I can say it.

Thank you for writing such a magnificent piece. I hope to see more from you soon.

I gave this piece a 4/5
~MRK

It's very pretty and the emotion is very raw but u could've done a lot more imagery

Why do i need imagery?

I love this poem, it is by far one of the greatest poems I have ever known or read. You did a really grear job at this, fantasic, 1000000/1000000