The Final Chapter(part two)

I love part 2 just as much as I loved the first.

Amazing.

There is a definite sense of suspense when reading your poems. This is a great chapter and I loved the images and the way it made me feel when reading it.

I had chills thinking about the thousand boots getting closer - this was an awesome image.

Loved the ending.

Well done

x

WOW, Tony. That is surely brilliant, more creative than your first part, and it's really hard to write a sequel better than the first part. You nailed this one!

I suggest you substitute:

decreasing.... with dwindling. It would sound more poetic :)

and 'the path you were give' instead of 'your given'.

I really love the pace, the darkness, the action and the tension all throughout. Kudos to you, I'm really sucked in to this.

Strong emotive words to set the scene.'Banish' 'horror''you can't escape the path your given'-a debatable issue to me -free will and destiny . Beautiful write:)

You finished this really well:

You cant escape the path your given
It was already written
This is my time,i lived my unwritten

final chapter.

I like this endong, when you say "I lived my unwritten final chapter, very original, you couldn't have done better. :)