Tony,
I loved Part One and part two is just as spetacular, the emotion is strong and evident and just makes me want to cry
You really are an awesome writer and this poem is amazing

love it
xxx

I, too, had to take a look at part one. You surely left us hanging in the suspense in that chapter, and this one carries the same effect. I especially liked the "thousand boots", a nice way to paint the picture of an army.

I like the continuation, I mean I already liked part one, but I think this one is just as good because you describe the feelings really well and I also like the images you use

You finished this really well:

You cant escape the path your given
It was already written
This is my time,i lived my unwritten

final chapter.

I like this endong, when you say "I lived my unwritten final chapter, very original, you couldn't have done better. :)

Strong emotive words to set the scene.'Banish' 'horror''you can't escape the path your given'-a debatable issue to me -free will and destiny . Beautiful write:)

WOW, Tony. That is surely brilliant, more creative than your first part, and it's really hard to write a sequel better than the first part. You nailed this one!

I suggest you substitute:

decreasing.... with dwindling. It would sound more poetic :)

and 'the path you were give' instead of 'your given'.

I really love the pace, the darkness, the action and the tension all throughout. Kudos to you, I'm really sucked in to this.

There is a definite sense of suspense when reading your poems. This is a great chapter and I loved the images and the way it made me feel when reading it.

I had chills thinking about the thousand boots getting closer - this was an awesome image.

Loved the ending.

Well done

x

I love part 2 just as much as I loved the first.

Amazing.