Unsheltered

The imagery of this poem is very clear, heart-breaking and realistic, writen with a beautiful yet sad use of words that only you could turn into a poem good job :)

Writer 'paints' a vivid picture of the plight of street children throughout the poem. The title echoes throughout the poem through the use of strong adjectives(chapped/lost/devouring) to appeal to our senses . The children are 'unsheltered' and exposed to bad weather,pollution,abuse and disease. The poet intentionally uses short lines interrupted for emphasis to highlight the urgency/serious situation depicted in the poem.

I have never been homeless yet this poem really pulled at my heart strings and I think its because you wrote it in a way that was very frank and honest.

"Some children play
on the street,
others live there. "

All of the poem is good but your ending hit me the hardest as it is so true.

Excellent

5/5

Such an epic write on such a sad reality.

Your choice of words really paint the canvas with each ruggedly truth telling brush stroke.

Well done!

Many children live unsheltered. Poverty is a world which I'd like to delete from the world.Fantastic poem Jenni. Good job, my friend.