I was reading, enjoying the tempo, and your powerful language... until I got lost trying to perceive... but you know, whatever this is about, it sounds awesome (I know, you're saying now: what a fool :P haha.. just shoot me a pm about the general idea, please? :P)

I quite like the rhyming that you have and the words make me feel like I am reading some poem that was written many, many, many years ago (like in Shakespeare time).

Shakespeare's poems usually have to be broken down and dissected into parts to understand them (well for me anyways) and this is kinda like that for me. I like that kind of poetry that makes you think but for some reason - possibly because it's too early in the morning, I am having a little trouble breaking down this poem.

I do however like the way it was written and again loved the rhyming, it does not seem forced!

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What a wonderful flow! Perfect piece Tim bro. Loved it.

This is amazing, I can't believe the use of words you do, it's unbelieavable, very creative and inspiring :)

Flowing and creative. I enjoyed reading it and got lost in your words and rhyme. Excellent