Alone at friday

by Ole Carsten   Mar 9, 2012


Friday afternoon,
I'm fresh, want your here,
if you hurry you could be here soon,
Want to see you even not near.
To be together again..

Rushing home, to a empty house,
Alone in the flat no one here,
so quiet you could hear a mouse.
longing to talk and hug and hear.
To be together again..

I'm not late,
Weekend fashion dress
But I think I hate
That I have tons of time, with no stress.
To be together again..

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  • 12 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Hi Lioness

    Thanks for this comment and your suport

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    This poem is quite sad. I hate the idea of being alone and you have expressed it well

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Hi dear women

    feel free to set commas and resent to me, I really appriciate you kind comments

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ole, I think your poem needs a few commas to break the wording up , as well as the use of different words you had a lot of repetition....however I love the idea behind this. Describing your lonely, which is usually a sad feeling, but here your lonliness is just anticipation waiting to see the one u love...I liked it! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Awww being alone sucks:(
    But I like the poem:)

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