Let Me Show You

Wow simply beautiful

This is a sweet, direct poem. The simplicity of your words emphasized the importance of your love for this person. I could feel how much you needed this person and want her to give you a chance.

Good job!

Its sweet to the ears. Such confidence in declaring you're the best she can have. And such guts to ask her to elope with you. There's this innocence attached to this piece that got me smiling. The message is clear but a little more polish will give it a poetic touch. Keep writing. Cheers! :)

I want to leave some constructive criticism on this piece.

While the poem shows your love and emotion for this person, it lacks direction...
First off, the lack of punctuation makes the poem loose its flow...due to us not being able to read the poem in the way you intend.

and it seems cliche in parts...while it has potential, a couple of changes would do well to direct it

But a nice intentional piece that gets the message across.

Awww how sweet, lovely poem, flawless :)