I'd Rather It Rain

by Poet on the Piano   Mar 11, 2012


I try to hide my eyes somehow
from the streams of sunshine,
and the warm hands that I feel
laying at my shoulder.

I don't know how to step out
of this darkness. It's more than
a mood, or a piece of clothing,
it's a shape I've come to be-
why can't I desire to stay
where the sunshine lasts all day?

The sky is a merciful blue,
clouds gentle and slow in their ballet....
all the while I wonder if this world
could ever be my world too.

I too, know the day will end,
and I try not to wait for it
in anticipation, but I crave
the lonely corners, solo lullabies
that live in black tears.

I'd rather it rain, just for now,
so I can willfully walk in the street
and know this is my life-
and that someday there will be a change.

Just a free write to release my emotions, written in a few minutes, thanks for reading.
Written 3/11/2012.
1:05 PM

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  • 12 years ago

    by Girl of Conviction

    Awesome free write :] i try to hide how im feeling sometimes but it never seems to work :/ i really love the style of your writing :] Great job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This poem is captivating.
    The uncertainity to this world we live in, and if we really truly belong here.

    I love the topic, I hope you write more of this
    5/5
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Fabulous, MaryAnne. It's an awesomely fears-provoking piece. You made me ponder... and such pieces are cherished by me deeply.

    I try to hide my eyes somehow
    from the streams of sunshine,

    ^ One can get shivers, by only reading these two lines. It's like saying sunshine doesn't suit me.

    ...darkness. It's more than
    a mood, or a piece of clothing,

    ^ wow. I love how you described darkness. It's not a regular mood (maybe referring to teenage constantly changing moods). It's neither a piece of clothing: this description is brilliant. If it's a piece of clothing, then you would easily pull it off from your body. But it's more than that... darkness lives within you. Love that.

    why can't I desire to stay
    where the sunshine lasts all day?

    ^ The rhyming here is simple, yet in this simplicity, sadness persists.

    all the while I wonder if this world
    could ever be my world too.

    ^ Oh MaryAnne, that is definitely melodic, yet in a frustrating note. We may all ask ourselves that same question..

    - I love how you said 'black tears' also.

    I'd rather it rain, just for now,
    so I could freely walk in the street
    and know this is my life-
    and someday there will be change coming.

    ^ freaking awesome... freaking heartbreaking.

    I only suggest that you change the very last line to:

    and someday there will be a change.

    ^ Read this loud with what is preceded by, and see how the sound would be prettier.

    ---- amazing write, MaryAnne.

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