If Cigarettes Could Talk

by Lioness   Mar 15, 2012


If cigarettes could talk -
I wonder what they
would whisper from
beneath their
charcoal breath.

From the fragility
minds of a chimney,
the chains remain
the link between
distained lips and
a cylinder death
trap.

The tobacco would
soak up the pain
and wrath of the
smoker with each
cloud, only
to conceal your secrets
below the white
paper roll.

I question, how long
would it take before
your thoughts are
exposed, and the
betrayal sinks in
to someone else's
lips from their
blaze?

Now tell me,
would you trust
your cigarette as
far as you
can smoke it?

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  • 12 years ago

    by Blissful

    The title is really appealing and I liked how you didn't put a question mark after it because at first glance it seems like a question but I like it more as a statement. Your poem was nicely drizzled with alliteration that didn't overpower the message. It was just right. My favorite part of this poem was the structure. It sets up a nice pace and rhythm when reading it which adds to the overall joy of reading. Your word choice was exquisite because it related to smoking but was weaved in a poetic manner into the piece. It made for some nice imagery throughout the poem. I also liked your use of personification like "minds of a chimney" because it added a more relatable atmosphere to your words. Overall this was a wonderful piece that had me thinking of what cigarettes would say about the people smoking them for they do hold many secrets.

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Great message, love it.
    your a very talented writer!

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    For all those who smoke:

    IF YOU DON'T CARE ABOUT YOURSELVES, THEN GO AHEAD AND SMOKE BUT AWAY FROM US! BECAUSE WE WANT TO LIVE IN GOOD HEALTH! AND OH HOW AWESOME IT WOULD BE IF YOU ALL GATHER AND DWELL IN A WORLD OF YOUR OWN! GOOOOOOSH.

    Sorry, had to say this. My ex-boyfriend used to smoke tons of cigarettes a day and I was sick of it. I tried so hard to let him quit smoking but all in vain! Anyway, I wish him all the best now, hahaha. I truly like your poem, I found it original and new! Keep writing, lovely.

  • 12 years ago

    by Darukh

    You not only explained the effects of cigarette but also touched upon the reasons why people smoke
    great work b

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    The title is really appealing and I liked how you didn't put a question mark after it because at first glance it seems like a question but I like it more as a statement. Your poem was nicely drizzled with alliteration that didn't overpower the message. It was just right. My favorite part of this poem was the structure. It sets up a nice pace and rhythm when reading it which adds to the overall joy of reading. Your word choice was exquisite because it related to smoking but was weaved in a poetic manner into the piece. It made for some nice imagery throughout the poem. I also liked your use of personification like "minds of a chimney" because it added a more relatable atmosphere to your words. Overall this was a wonderful piece that had me thinking of what cigarettes would say about the people smoking them for they do hold many secrets.

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