by Decayed
If cigarettes could talk... I guess they would bit**-laugh at smokers. |
by Tara Kay
Liz, Just when I am turning in for the night, you post this piece and get me thinking all over again... |
by Maple Tree
I think this poem should be placed on all ciggy packs :-) Well written poem... love it Liz... I'm a smoker and now I feel like my lungs are applauding you for this awesome poem... |
by victor dyck
Itsgoodtoexpressyoourfeelingsaboutsomelifelessbutwhoknowsihaveofttrnwonderedaboutthid |
by L
I hate the smoke and I just dont smoke. |
by Paul Gondwe
I loved everything about this. When i read this, i was thinking what if that cigarette i smoke every friday really spilt every little secret of mine and i concluded that i wouldnt trust the lil guy no matter what. |
by Ole Carsten
I don't like smoking or some smokes, but you touch something in me with this poem. |
by Ms Happiness
Lol I agree with Abed:) |
Well written and real ..Smoking stinks haha |
by Karla
I hate the smoke and I don't smoke either. Loved your poem. |
by Ronel McCarthy
I love the imagery .......charcoal breath........minds of a chimney.......sensory words to bring the message across -the poet's dislike for smoking ..............and the deeper level-the things we do and why we do it. |
The title really cought my eye. I have never heard anything like this poem and i thought it was very original and sent a great message. We can't let something as harmful as that, control our life :) I would love it if you could check out some of my new writes. I would love to hear what u think :) |
by Tara Kay
Congrats on the win :) |
I LOVED READING THIS, everytime I see someone smoke I feel a dagger run through me, hearing someone think of the damage it does other then me is a dear thing, I WISH THEY WERE BAND!!! |
I LOVED THIS POEM, ONE OF MY ALL TIME FAVORITES, I HATE SEEING PEOPLE SMOKE AND IT KILLS ME INSIDE EVERYWHERE I GO, EVERYTIME I SEE A CIGARETTE WITH SOMEONE I FEEL A DAGGER RUN THROUGH ME, IT'S NICE TO KNOW OTHER PEOPLE ARE AWARE OF IT'S DAMAGE, AMAZING POEM. |
I LOVED THIS POEM, EASILY BECAME ONE OF MY FAVORITE, FOR SURE, IT'S NICE TO KNOW SOME OTHER PEOPLE KNOW OF DAMAGE SMOKING DOES, AND CARES, AMAZING POEM, I WISH SMOKING WAS BAND!!! |
by Sunshine
The title is really appealing and I liked how you didn't put a question mark after it because at first glance it seems like a question but I like it more as a statement. Your poem was nicely drizzled with alliteration that didn't overpower the message. It was just right. My favorite part of this poem was the structure. It sets up a nice pace and rhythm when reading it which adds to the overall joy of reading. Your word choice was exquisite because it related to smoking but was weaved in a poetic manner into the piece. It made for some nice imagery throughout the poem. I also liked your use of personification like "minds of a chimney" because it added a more relatable atmosphere to your words. Overall this was a wonderful piece that had me thinking of what cigarettes would say about the people smoking them for they do hold many secrets. |
by Darukh
You not only explained the effects of cigarette but also touched upon the reasons why people smoke |
by nouriguess
For all those who smoke: |
Great message, love it. |