Destiny of a Marooned Dog (Lilibonelle)

by Daisy if you do   Mar 16, 2012


Five hundred sixteen full moons
navigating the course from straight,
with gales of breath from birth
anchoring any decisions of my fate

Navigating the course from straight
turbulent waters void of ruling suns
often found me in the eye of the storm
tip-toeing planks of courses yet begun

With gales of breath from birth
as waning to waxing moons due phase
Mercury was somehow spotted in slumber
in the crows nest far from Jupiter's gaze

anchoring any decisions of my fate
in a harbor where kindness shall reside
loyalty and love are my closest neighbors
and so shall happiness be the guide

***Lilibonelle

Four stanzas, four lines each. abcb rhyme scheme

Stanza 1: Line 1 Line 2 Line 3 Line 4

Stanza 2: Line 1 (line 2 from first stanza) Line 2 Line 3 Line 4

Stanza 3 Line 1 (line 3 from first stanza) Line 2 Line 3 Line 4

Stanza 4 Line 1 (line 4 from first stanza) Line 2 Line 3 Line 4

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  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Kay
    This form seems so difficult. Yet you did it with ease. The piece is excellent. Love the concept of the marooned dog and the planets.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    Kay*

    I know I've told you about my thoughts on this poem a while back when originally written, but this is absolutely fantastic! I love this form and think anything with repetition is generally insanely difficult in nature. You have taken a prompt about a dog and made it into this beautifully crafted masterpiece!

    I love how you made the theme of this poem a marooned ship and really played on that - how easily it could be tied into the astrological side with the full moon and changing of the tides, etc.

    "Mercury was somehow spotted in slumber"

    this was my favorite line, and one I keep reading over and over, it replays itself in my head. This one stuck out the most and I'm not sure why. Spotted in slumber, as though it's taboo or even secret... beautifully written!

  • 12 years ago

    by Moonlit Candles

    I thought this was a great and mysterious poem. I absolutely love ships so this caught my attention. The describing the emotion felt here was bone chilling yet nice at the same time. Nice Write. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Ronel McCarthy

    Interesting form.......you managed it well.I need to read it again.

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