Aww, this piece is sad.
But there is so much love in it.

This poem is so elegant, and heartfelt... the sadness can be felt but also the feeling of happy memories... the poem is so beautiful... very nice~

Awesome poem lonely soul. Such a beautifully sad poem- hits you right in the heart. Nice work friend.
Lostlove~

I did like your title...very fitting to the poem but...can you count the number of I's you have used? Most are not necessary...

I walk slowly
lost in somber thoughts
beneath a half moon sky
amongst sleeping willows
^^^

Slowly walking by
I'm lost..etc..

Feet tread an icy path, lit up
only by a soft glow
of evanescent memories
as I stumble
to find my way
^^

Stumbling..would be enough?

I suddenly see
an evanescent shape
mirrored upon a lake
or, was it just a passing cloud
uncovering
a shimmering Luna
^^^

This whole stanza isn't necessary and adds nothing to the poem?

Perhaps, a deja vu, or was
it the silvery luminescence
bouncing
of an angel's face

Maybe in deja vu and it should be off an angel's face

A tranquil breeze
whistling in my ears
stirs up
pensive thoughts
of a love
denied

A lambent face
impregnated in my mind
filled with mischief, and
unspoken words
that tear up my heart
from a love I never got

I never got...a love lost is more poetic in my mind?

A smile, like no other
that I treasure
deep within my heart
to this day
and will, forever

That I...could be replace with treasured?

Sometimes, I wish
I could touch the moon
And steal its moonshine

But, this is only my reverie....
a daydream of a fool
who lost his sunshine
many moons ago

^^^

You haven't posted in a while and....these are just my thoughts

Just going to focus on your first two stanzas for now..if that's ok?

I walk slowly
lost in somber thoughts
beneath a half moon sky
amongst sleeping willows

^^^

This has no dimension to it IMO.starting a poem off with I annoys me...sorry...and...there's nothing there to keep my interest...

Slowly walking
alone, with sombre thoughts
'neath a half moon
I stroll amist sleeping willows???

Feet tread a broken path, lit up
by a soft glow
of ephemeral memories
as thoughts struggle
to find a way around

Once more feet tread a broken path
the soft glow...ephemeral memories
as thought struggle
to find their way...

Just some thoughts...

Hands, ready to grab the moon
and steal its moonshine

^ I had to stop at these two lines and say: wow! I really like the scenery you have drawn before my eyes especially that it is night in here :)

David, what is better than your comments are your pieces.

I have to tell you that the end,,,, I haven't expected that at all! It was a shocker. I mean 95% of the poem, i was daydreaming with you... I felt even like walking on the moon. But then, in the end, all changed.

Amazing.

Wow I can definitely say this is better still a little of somewhere but perhaps in the breaking of flow but great write none the less and I enjoyed reading it,,I love the word choice :) great scenery

My comment before revised---

This feels to me a beautiful picture but a broken puzzle,,it's greatly and amazingly worded and really pulls you in to an abstract dream full of wonders and a glow and a great full moon,,,so great job with scenery :)

Its very beautiful sad poem, nice use of imagery loved ur style 5/5 :-)

An Elequent and Wxquisite Write!!!