Noura,
I like this style, I am not crazy about it...
beyond that I may warm to your new style if I re-read a few times, though I can say, there is still that touch of greatness at the beginning, with the imagery being so strong and visual.

Is this a form I have not come across, for it should be...

I think that the repetition worked until the repeatness of "imagine" became too much, it sort of killed the flow right at the beginning, which didn't bond in with the rest of the piece

However saying that, there was beautiful imagery, which like I said... was vivid and strong.

love always

xxxxx

Oh... I do love this piece... very different, and unique....I vision butterfly's caught within a storm drain and unicorns... I'm sure I'm way off but to imagine is to allow your mind to float upon clouds... and I really enjoyed this piece~

Mmm... I read this now like 3 times.. the first time I felt uncomfortable, to be honest .. but then, I felt like you captured my pondering all through. I actually, weirdly.. like the repetition.

I think (I hope I did :P) I know what you're talking about!!!

I believe it's about someone asking you to imagine something bigger than your imagination. So you imagine it partially because in your head, you cannot build what was said to you in images. This is kind of philosophical, is it?

Or... wait...!!! are you talking about poetry itself? I believe you are!! oh my god, you are a goddess.... okay...

I believe you are saying that whenever you read some complicated metaphors, you start to imagine what is beyond specific keywords, and not the whole image... In the way you view them, they are just: FROZEN WORDS!

If that is what it is... then... I'm speechless.

Hello Poetess.
How different! There is so much more than meets the eye in this piece...I just dont know what it is yet but it keps pulling me back to it over and over. I've never seen this type of poetry but its awesome and you did write a great piece. I just keep saying Damn...great poem!!!

P.S I just read a piece about a white horse and the Atlantic....strange

This is quite a unique way of writing a poem. I think that the repetition is there for us to really take in what you are trying to say. To read the words slowly and think about what was said.

Different ways to say the same thing. I like that!!!

Great job

x

I feel like this is how I write my poems. I come up with a line... and I tell myself different variations of that line, picking the one that makes the most sense. But the way this was done, was very... unsure (in a good way). It, to me, felt like you were unsure how to feel, what to feel, what to see, how to interpret your surroundings... without actually saying it. You led me to feel it, believe it.. and that was awesome.

I like that you didn't keep up with the multiple changes of lines, because you definitely were able to branch out on it and make it your own more so. The third and fourth bits were definitely my favorite with the connection to your first/second stanzas.. the way your ending wrapped EVERYTHING up just made it beautiful for me.

I like your imagery here, too... the horse and the butterfly. They go together in a fairytale sense in my head, but they also are so very different. AH this whole piece, makes me want to comment on every little bit.. I can't help it. I love, love, LOVE this piece.

Oh the repetition. It seems to be a theme amongst my votes this week, but this was my favorite about 'Imagination'.. it left SO much to your imagination. The way she wrote the same lines with different perspectives and criss crossed wording just made the poem, with such a significant impact in the 'lasting' factor. I particularly liked how there were different stanzas creating so much imagery, where they seemingly seemed polar opposites, and brought them together in a creative and beautiful way. This poem definitely played to many senses, and it's one I've read multiple times. I was torn between this and her Pirating Perfection poem, but the details in the imagery won out here. Wonderfully written!