Jenni, Jenni, Jenni

Perfect is the only word I can find to define your poem.Nominated.

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lol Karla:)

I agree it is perfect, I enjoyed reading it :)

Jenni I am taken back by this. It is just brilliant.

5/5

I love this short but sad poem that says so much!

The last two lines - emasculated as a woman. Brilliant!!!

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I like how you portrayed the image of women.. lovely piece. and the style is breath-capturing.

I'll be pretty honest, I have no idea what this is about, well I know is about woman but I don't understand it.

But I do enjoy reading the words.
They have a nice flow.

This poem is unique and original... I like it..

I loved that you used the word 'elixir' (I had to look it up in the dictionary) but I liked the use of it after learning the meaning :)

The ending was strange but in a good way... I'd love to know more about what you meant by this poem!

Great job!

Your wording was deep, yet brilliant.
An original creation of talent. It's alive, the format was eye catching and ...well all I can say is IT ROCKS

I've read this poem through so many times. I've looked to the comments to see if there are any explanations. Man, I gotta tell you, this poem is hard! I don't know what you are writing about, I'll be honest, but I do know that I get a strong feeling of woe when I read this piece, and I think (since the comments I read for it didn't offer descriptions) that everyone else is likely responding to a similar radiating emotion. This poem is so slight, it's delicate and every word has a place in it. I think of a woman going though menopause. I think of a womb that's lost the elixir of life, of a woman who looks at her hands and knows she isn't "mother" anymore, she isn't fertile. I see eyes that have no sound, and I see an emptiness that makes me grieve for my own inevitable end. The last few lines rub me and make me wish I had emotion to cry, because that is what this poem is for me, it's a rough sob that can't be expressed as harshly as it should be, and the beauty is in the quiet lament that takes its place.

I loved the way you described it the tittle was awesome so simple yet i had know idea ... very well writen jen jen

5/5

I thought this was a great and mysterious poem. You could try to picture this poem from so many angles. From what I read I was seeing how the elixir was the only thing keeping her alive so her life has swept away from underneath her. Great job. :)

I love how it's a short poem with so much emotion. very deep 5/5