Sharp Edges

There was so much power and emotion packed into this compact piece. It was clothed with an ample amount of metaphors which was great! You used each word nicely here without having any fillers. Every word held an important part of your overall poem without anything being wasted or overused. Sometimes people go overboard with fancy words and whatnot, but I love that this poem was raw and stripped of all of that leaving the sheer sense of pure emotion. I LOVE how you branded blood with the color of distrust. How wonderful! Very creative indeed. Doubt and distrust usually go hand in hand. This poem left me with so many questions at the end and left me wondering. What was doubted? What brought on the distrust? Was it all just a misconception? I can go on and on. I like that this poem left it open for interpretation. Great job.

What a metaphoric delight this poem is! This poem is a sad, metaphoric firecracker that just pops!!

The title says it all and more, and I knew this was going to be a sad and touching piece.
First stanza: the mind is a crazy time bomb that can go off at any moment, hence my reasons for calling this poem a fire cracker.

Doubt can harm an imagination, leaving it stagnant and empty. Powerful emotions filled within this first stanza!
Second stanza: Band aids are only temporary... Oh don't you just wish life had a huge permanent band aid that cured all? This stanza was so thought provoking!!
Third stanza: Oh this ending stanza left me with emptiness... distrust and misconception can rip at the heart, leaving the inner "flesh" exposed, for sadness.
Ending comment: I was so drawn to this poem for many reasons, but the main reason is when the author can say so much in so little, it has to be highlighted in my opinion... I loved this piece from start to finish! - well done TJ

TJ congrats on the win! So well-deserved, great job!

I really like your methaphors, your very creative I never would have thought it great job :)

This is such a profound and engrossing piece. The words you use are indeed very sharp and cutting, it leaves a great impact on the reader and on their emotions as well. I love the image of the razor to highlight the realism of this doubt, how it takes away bits and pieces of the mind's imagination and dreams. I really liked the touch of the band-aid metaphor too, it was such a simple image, yet you tied it in well. It IS temporary, and sometimes the cuts underneath still leave scars, and the band-aids begin to curl.

Incredibly deep, please keep this up!
MaryAnne :)