Comments : Rejections of Theory

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    Kay*

    I can't believe what you wrote out of the prompt you were given.. it is absolutely astounding.

    I find myself reading this over and over and not quite sure what I should or even can say. You've wowed me here.. our group has so much talent and I feel like I'm falling over everyone's poetry with such praise like I'm a complete buffoon, but you all make me feel so strong in your poetry.

    The imagery here I feel is really important, especially in the first two stanzas.. though I don't feel you should speak of yourself in an urn. You're not even that old :P lmao. Don't hurt me :)

    waiting
    for a resurrection
    to become
    all that I
    should, could
    and might
    have been

    Oh I love this, and I SO love the "should, could and might" part. It reminds me of my mom when I was a kid always saying "you shoulda, coulda, woulda, but didn't..so now what?". What a lesson to learn, isn't it?

    Your ending makes my faith soar in a way you probably understand (lol). Non believers will always question, but we just know. We've felt His presence, we've witnessed His miracles, grace and mercy, and I feel that no matter what science will try to show us (the big bang), our faith will not waiver.

    Beautifully written, one of my faves from the relay!

  • 12 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Though I'm not a critique Poet, DD, I do believe your words are very profound and my interpretation is of Goodwill.

    Though my hands have settled,
    dust from folds of gingham pleats
    and ballroom gowns sweeping,

    its from floors past, thresholds
    of womanhood, I age.
    Now crept upon me ashes.

    An urn waiting for
    a resurrection to become
    all that I could, should
    and might have been.

    Whispers an unsettling hypothesis,
    boggling my mind.

    Theories can be dispelled
    with belief, knowing
    my heartbeat cannot be recreated
    with a big bang.

    I enjoy your Poetry and hope my interpretation causes no ill feeling.
    Peace and Blessings

  • 11 years ago

    by Mimed Lovette

    This is one poem which I can read over and over again. It rolls off your tongue so easily and I could feel it going along with a tune from a song.

    I don't know how comment on such a wonderful piece as it has rendered me wordless. I love this poem as much as I love my books. Great job lady!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is a truly wonderful piece - I enjoyed immensely three times and will add to my favourites! All of it is excellent, but the second stanza is astoundingly good.
    Well done indeed and all the very best
    Ben
    * There's a double "like" in stanza 2.

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Kay
    I have always loved your verses. I could read them over and over and never get tired of them.This is no exception.

    Age has now crept
    upon me like
    like ashes
    in an urn, waiting
    for a resurrection
    to become
    all that I
    should, could
    and might
    have been.

    There is a sadness in your words...like you have things you never finished.The entire poem is awesome. This stanza just held me a little longer.
    Take care
    Love Cindy