by Sylvia
I believe building walls, be they brick or other material is a part of us, our protective instinct. Protect us from hurt, and the harsh things in the world. Doesn't seem to work since we let the walls down, events happen and back the walls go. Well done. |
by Moonlit Candles
I though this was a great poem. So much said in little of words. I thought the brick wall described here was a great metaphor. It goes to show that in todays society everyone is looking to fit in. And they will do anything to be someone. But then you describe your just like everyone else. A simple person. Which is great cause a simple person stays up longer. It's the ones who want greater riches and gains that like you brought out "They will serve their purpose then be torn down." And then of course the next one comes along. All in all a great poem. Nive write. :) |
by Dreamofolwin
Sometimes life DOES feel like a brick wall, and its hard to "fit in" Also we feel we are up against a brick wall when we "Serve your purpose, then be torn down..." |
by Lady Nik
You're right hun, you are unique. And this poem shows that very well. Good job. |
Amazing piece indeed. I totally agree with Sylvia, this one should have won. So much has been said in such little words great write indeed. |
by Meena Krish
Yes life is like a brick wall and we build and tone ourselves to fit into the society just to fit in but at the same time we are building a brick wall to protect ourselves from the nastiness of society..a very intense write that is written with just a few lines..loved it! |
by White Orchid
I liked how you described life to a brick wall. That metaphor is so brilliant because bricks try to fit in and bricklaying is a difficult job, each brick has to fit in perfectly or else it doesn't work, I think it compares nicely with life how people try to break you into their mold and others try to fit in and if you're unique you kinda don't fit, also after a while brick walls are torn down and replaced as all man made objects are, so what's the point in fitting in if it is just going to crumble. I loved the use of this illustration to drive home a point. And your flow and word choice was executed very well also. Great job. 5/5 |
by Maple Tree
I'm a huge fan of short and powerful poems and here you go folks- This poem says so much within 9 lines- I had to highlight this wonderful gem! |