Comments : Me

  • 12 years ago

    by Girl of Conviction

    You want somebody, just anybody
    To lay their hands on your soul tonight
    You want a reason to keep believin'
    That someday you're gonna see the light
    You're in the dark
    There's no one left to call
    And sleep's your only friend
    Well even sleep
    Can't hide you from all those tears
    And all the pain and all the days
    You wasted pushin' them away
    It's your life, it's time you face it

    <<Its hard to go thru this thing called life especially when u feel all alone :/ trust me im sure alot of us have been there i know i have and i can relate.

    Like u said sooner or later you just have to face the music itll pass its just going thru it that makes it so hard

    good job :]]

    5/5
    Tammi Toxic

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Love this poem...like to read again and again....excellent5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Croat

    Hard sad lines...
    I liked it!

    Steven

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Sometimes we don't want to face life, we just want to turn away and wait until the dust settles again. But in this 'life', nothing will happen unless we take action.
    "You wanna scream 'cause you're
    Desperate"
    ---the word 'wanna' is considered an informal word, but for others, it's not a word entirely. Consider changing wanna to 'want to'.
    "You want somebody, just anybody
    To lay their hands on your soul tonight
    You want a reason to keep believin'"
    ---I love this part. The deperation you mentioned earlier is explicitly shown here.
    Overall, a very nice write. But I don't understand the quotation mark placed in the beginning. Other than that, a really worthy read. Keep writing.
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Silent Girl

    Sad poem :( 5/5