Can't you see....

The feelings are heartfelt and real. I would suggest you not capitalise all letters coz i see that its a continuing line but you have capitalised the first letter. That removes the flow of the poem. Also, i would sugget you include commas where necessary so that it flows even better. I loved the message behind his piece, well written babes. Though sad, i hope you keep on being strong,
Paul-G

The feelings are heartfelt and real. I would suggest you not capitalise all letters coz i see that its a continuing line but you have capitalised the first letter. That removes the flow of the poem. Also, i would sugget you include commas where necessary so that it flows even better. I loved the message behind his piece, well written babes. Though sad, i hope you keep on being strong,
Paul-G

This is such a good poem!
the emotion was amazing, and the flow was good! 5/5 again!

Very good! i usually hide my pain with a smile or just telling people im ok but sooner or later you break down :/ this is great! i love it!

5/5 :]

Beautifully written with a deep sadness. It's easy to hide our feelings and thoughts and then it's hard when few people want to listen or understand, but it will get better in life, just take it day by day.....there's always people we meet who are that one special friend to "see" our pain :]
keep writing!