Hey, I think you should add some punctuation into your poem, so that it will be easier to tell whether you are asking a question, or pausing... makes reading it out loud a bit easier. I really liked the poem! In the second line of the second stanza, it should read "you're", not your. 9th line of the second stanza: it should be "hair is", not are. 11th line of the second stanza: it should read "smile makes", not make since smile is singular.

This poem is real nice, you truly are an amazing writer, thanks for sharing your work with us and look forward to your next poem take care x x x

I really like this poem!!! 5/5!

yeah you did so great wen ritin this poem! u have exallent talent! ill make sure this poem is one that i save! ;)

Steph

Beautiful poem:) I wrote before something like this but really it's different ... talks about fairtale though:) Keep on writing and I can't believe that your rate is 3.9.. it could be higher than that:)

~!~Sedusha~!~

hey very nice poem u have written again...........am gonan read them all ..an comment on them