Comments : Choice

  • 12 years ago

    by Clown

    Nice flow, the rhyming didnt seem forced at all, the over all message I got was that there comes a time when we all must make a difficult choice and we cant run from it regardless of how we feel.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    As the title says choice, we have to choose always, and that's a tough decision. I found the rhymes good.

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    The rhymes were well penned, but there are some issues with the punctuation. This line for example:

    "Gradually sinking, into my head
    Guilt is such. A powerful fear"
    I suggest you remove the period. It'll flow much better..

    "Time is racing, making me choose
    Which one to keep, which one to lose"
    I like this part. It's so relatable. Usually choices make you lose something you don't want to lose if you choose the wrong one.

    "Decisions wailing, I cannot decide
    Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide"
    I really like these endings.. The reader is left to think what would happen next..

    Overall, a really nice write. Keep writing :) 5/5

    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I hate that feeling of having to make a choice and for a few moments or a day you want to just escape the pondering questions in your head but there is literally no where to run or hide!....nice poem, I can relate especially right now with some decisions I have to make!

    Good job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    Wow again top notch. you have some real talents there. this one was really inspired. great work

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    Hmm
    lets see starting with the title
    its perfect for this poem

    the flow was great and the rhymes was perfect

    i love how u ended this poem
    so good
    overall very well penned poem
    5/5 =)

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I know, I commented on this one before. But I tetras it and so far this one is my favorite from you.